Seduction Fest (PG-13)

[Amanda]

*The following Fan Fiction contains mature situations, and is intended for an older youth audience. Reader discretion is advised.*

Everyone was rushing into David Crombie Secondary School for the big end of the year dance party that was going on tonight! There were lots of people, and it was really noisy.

"So Sage...wanna dance?" asked Alex, with a huge smile on his face.
"I'd love to!" responded Sage. So off they went to the dance floor.
"Hey Lance!" said Dizzy, running up to him. "Hey man, what's up?"
"Oh nothing really, but I got new shoes today, see? Do you think Cally'd like them? I mean, I think they're pretty neat, so where is Cally?"
"Umm, I don't know, I think she might be with Annie somewhere. You weren't going to ask her to dance, were you?"
"Well, I-" Dizzy's sentence was cut short by Cally calling for Lance.

"Lance! Oh hey Sage, hi Dizzy...umm, can I talk to Lance alone for a minute please?"
"Uh sure...Dizzy, you wanna get a drink? But if you're not thirsty, then I guess we can always watch what great dancers other people are and wish we could dance like them."
"Yeah, sure." Dizzy and Sage go to the food bar.

"Lance-look what I found."
"Its the comic...aw man...let's see..."
"Well what's in it?"
"I can't believe this..." Lance looked kind of confused and shocked...
"What?"
"The comic...it's kind of different from all the others..." "What do you mean? Let me see it." Cally's jaw dropped open when she saw what was in the comic.

I'll write more soon. So what do you think?

[jennydoll]

The structure's kinda confusing. Usually in a story every new person who speaks is in a new paragraph so it was a little hard to read. Other than that keep it up, I can't wait to read more.

[aeon]

(*cough*my comment on names...*cough*)


I can't wait to see the rest ;D It sounds exciting.

[Kitty88]

Amanda said:

"So Sage...wanna dance?" asked Alex, with a huge smile on his face.

I can't wait to hear the rest of your story. It held my attention right away. My only suggestion is that you make sure to call the charactors by there stage names not their real names...like Alex/Lance. It's confusing.

[Amanda]

I know, I made a mistake lol. Thanks for the comments so far! I'll try to write some more soon...

[Amanda]

" Violet is taking her top of for some guy-this can't be right Lance!"
"Yeah, and why is Blaze dancing with some creepy looking girl? I would never dance with anyone but Sage!"

The twins were so confused, they had no idea what to do.

"We've got to figure out what this means-we've got to stop it."
"Yeah, but how?" said Lance.
"I don't know...look, maybe we should go find Doyle." Cally said desperately.
"But it's Friday at 9:00pm...the store closed at 7:00."

The twins then went their seperate ways at the dance for a while to relax. Lance went to go find Sage, and Cally went to go find Annie.

"Hey Sage, I'm sorry that took so long..."
"Oh, don't worry about it, Dizzy's been showing me some of his breakdancing moves!"
"Hey Lance,check this out!" said Dizzy excitedly.

Dizzy started dancing crazy, and making the people around him laugh.

"So um, does Cally like breakdancing? Because if she does, then I can always-"

*Meanwhile*

"Hey, Annie!"
"Oh, hi Cal! So why did it take you so long to get here?"
"Oh, nothing, nothing...so is Jack here yet?" Cally said smiling, looking so happy.

All of a sudden the world goes blue.

[Smitty]

Your story is very entertaining. Violet taking her top off? Tee hee - that's actually legal in Toronto. I like the part where Lance says he won't dance with anyone but Sage. Loyal guys are so kind of hard to find these days...

[bigfanofsage]

Interesting story so far... I await the next installment!... with MY shirt on. lol

[casey]

"Awesome story. I can really picture Dizzy & Sage trying to breakdance. So funny."

[needlemania]

Titillating story! Is anyone other than a comic character going to remove their top?

[Amanda]

Lance thinks to himself, "Oh, great". He says "Um Sage, can you just hang out here with Dizzy for a little while longer?"
" Uh, sure I guess...why what's wrong?" she replies.
"Um, it's nothing, I'm just not feeling well, ok I gotta go bye!" He gives her a quick kiss on the cheek.


"Nope, I haven't seen him yet." Annie tells Cally.
"Oh, ok um..could you just hold on for a minute? I'll be right back!"
"Yeah...where are you going?"
"Nowhere, nowhere...you know what, just enjoy yourself without me for now!"
"But Cal-" Cally had already left her.

All of a sudden, everyone is dancing like crazy! As Lance is going to find Cally, this girl approaches him.

"Hey sexy, wanna dance?"
" Um no, I already have a girlfriend, she's right the-"
The girl grabbed Lance and started dancing with him.

"What the hell, let go of me!"

Sage heard Lance yelling, and went to see what was going on.

*Meanwhile*

Cally went to search for Lance, when she spotted Jack.

"Uh, hi Jack!"
"Oh, hey Cally! You enjoying the party?"
"Um, yeah it's great..."
"You looks so beautiful tonight."

[Smitty]

I am really enjoying your story. I think Sage is about to become really jealous...

[Omnicron]

I hate Jack. Cally can do much better, and Jack is a manipulative idiot. Jack must die.

[Amanda]

Okay, I'm stuck on my fanfic lol. I mean I had a lot of ideas, but it's really hard once you start writing them! You guys can add on to it if you want!

[Omnicron]

Just kill Jack.